One Flew Over the Cuckold’s Nest

In her comment on last week’s post Aymiee asked whether I have considered a graphical interface for Ginger and Fred. While I’m not sure what she meant by that, it reminded me of xtranormal.com — a site that makes animated movies from your script. I dug up a draft I’ve had sitting around for a couple years. Originally, most of the story took place through instant messages between the two characters so it was already heavy on dialogue. Here then, is an update of that story and the resulting movie:

Ginger: Hi

Fred: Hi. Got time to talk?

Ginger: If it’s quick. I have to get home to the kids.

Fred: OK. Did you have a good day?

Ginger: Not really. Big fight this morning.

Fred: Sorry… Any progress on the divorce?

Ginger: No. He won’t discuss it. And you know I won’t leave my kids with him.

Fred: I know.

Ginger: I’m still sleeping in the guest room. We spend almost no time together.

Fred: You told me. It’s just…

Ginger: What?

Fred: I had a strange thought recently.

Ginger: You have a lot of strange thoughts. It’s one of the things I like about you… What?

Fred: A coworker wants to set me up on a blind date.

Ginger: Do you want to go?

Fred: No. Even if I weren’t involved with you, I hate blind dates.

Ginger: Waiting for the strange part…

Fred: Well, It occurred to me that I’m being faithful to another man’s wife.

Ginger: I told you I’m not sleeping with him. I’m being faithful to you too.

Fred: But you’re not leaving him.

Ginger: I can’t right now. I told you.

Fred: I know. What am I supposed to do? Talk to you only when no one’s home? See you only when he is out of town and your kids are with friends? And… what?

Ginger: You sound angry.

Fred: I feel stupid.

Ginger: You are the smartest person I know.

Fred: Smart people do stupid things all the time.

Ginger: And wanting to be with me is a stupid thing?

Fred: Now you’re getting angry.

Ginger: Frustrated. What do you want me to do?

Fred: I want us to be together. I just don’t see it happening. I can’t afford to support you. You don’t have a job to support yourself. It will be three more years before your kids might be out on their own….

Ginger: And…?

Fred: I don’t know where I fit into your life.

Ginger: I guess you don’t. Fit, that is.

Fred: Go home to your family. I can’t do this any more….

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[Note: Learn more about Fred and Ginger here. ~Tim]

11 Comments

  1. Somehow I didn’t see the title until I went to comment. Oh that’s perfect.

    Really diggin Ginger’s pants.
    This was a really interesting experiment.

    On the story itself…
    Nice dialog. I felt bad for both of them. It felt real. You paced it so the reader could sense Fred coming to the conclusion that he came to. And I think it works really well.
    Karen :0)

    Thanks! The experiment, of course was as much to see if I could write a flash using only dialog then to play around with the animation. I’m really glad it sounds real. ~Tim

  2. That was creepy as heck, deep within the uncanny valley. However, the video also completely took the edge off a somewhat pat mainstream drama exchange. At 1:57, her pseudo-smile is just hilarious.

    Creepy, sure.. but fun too, right? ~Tim

  3. Wow, you are creative!

    Such a sad conversation for them to be having. Fred’s last words are the only ones that make any sense for him.

    Aww, and the look on his face when he tells her that he can’t do this anymore πŸ™

    Thanks! Odd, isn’t it, that even a cartoonish face conveys recognizable emotion? ~Tim

  4. I can’t hear the dialog where I am. But I’ve written a couple FridayFlash’s that are just dialog. It can work pretty well in this format. What matters is really what’s unsaid.

    Good job!

    Thanks! I agree, writing dialog [or anything else for that matter] depends as much on what we choose to leave out as what we leave in. ~Tim

  5. I really liked the dialogue. The movie was just creepy. LOL! I like my own mind-pictures of Fred and Ginger better. They’re much more elegant. πŸ™‚

    Thanks! I never really imagined Fred and Ginger like this either, but there are pretty limited options with the free software I used. Now if we could just figure out how to get the pictures out of your head into my movie…. ~Tim

  6. Echoing Laura!! I had my own pictures of them, too. Love the dialog. Kind of made me sad πŸ™ . I was thinking more on the line of a comic book… but this was also way coool. I really really like the dialog!!

    Thanks! So now I need to get to work on the graphic novel [or comic book] version of Fred and Ginger. What a cool idea! ~Tim

  7. I liked the overall feel to your story and the characters too (but they were just a tad creepy though :P), the dialog was great even if it was sad… Nice writing! πŸ™‚

    Thanks! If I hadn’t gotten the written part where I wanted it I wouldn’t have bothered with the animation. It was a fun experiment though. ~Tim

  8. “It occurred to me that I’m being faithful to another man’s wife.” great line! I’m afraid I didn’t watch the movie due to having no sound on this machine, but what a great idea to do something like this

    Thanks! That’s my favorite line too. ~Tim

  9. Great dialogue Tim – very real. Like others I prefer to create my own vision of Fred and Ginger. The clip seems to take value away from the dialogue, if that makes sense. In other words, the story is deserving of Jimmy Stewart and Audrey Hepburn, or the like.
    I love how you convey so much emotion in such a short conversation.

    Thanks! Jimmy Stewart and Audrey Hepburn are two of my favorites. How cool is it that you would think of them?! ~Tim

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