Comments on: Lost in Space

By: Tim Remp

Tim Remp — Tue, 05 Jan 2010 14:26:19 +0000

I think, being alien and not wanting to get caught, he leaves orbit and while passing through the asteroid field near Mars, he finds the largest asteroid in the area and launches it towards the Earth ending all life/temptation in what looks like a nature disaster. Just a thought.

This was a very fun read with great reader hooks. I too am also curious to know if you’re going to write an ending?

http://timremp.blogspot.com/2009/12/aftermath.html

Ah, the “If at first you don’t succeed, destroy all evidence that you tried” plan. I haven’t decided yet about writing an ending. Stay tuned! ~Tim

By: G.P. Ching

G.P. Ching — Mon, 04 Jan 2010 15:25:52 +0000

If he’s like American men, he leaves but calls her every 6 months to “hook up”. Heh, Heh. What a fun story. Well written with an immediate hook. It would be interesting to hear the dialogue between these two if you decided to write a follow up piece.

Thanks! I think the dialog would be very one-sided with Ginger chattering away and Fred barely keeping up. That could be fun. ~Tim

By: Virginia Moffatt

Virginia Moffatt — Mon, 04 Jan 2010 11:04:06 +0000

Like others I like the idea of love being stronger than gravity. However, I wonder whether he would have been able to stay, even if he’d wanted to. He seemed to think his initial presence had made an impact it shouldn’t. What if staying for love affected the whole planet in a bad way? Wouldn’t that make him think twice – personal responsibility versus love?

I’d like to think he stayed, but I’ve a feeling he might not have been able to. (But then I’m a fan of bitter sweet endings)

I think he would think twice [or more]. I tried to write him with a zeal for his job and a sense of responsibility. I’m wondering now whether I didn’t emphasize that enough or all the readers are hopeless romantics? ~Tim

By: J. M. Strother

J. M. Strother — Fri, 01 Jan 2010 20:49:31 +0000

Reminds me of Starman. Shame on you for leaving us hanging.

Here’s my take:
He beams her up, intending to elope to a nice little low tech planet he came across in his earlier travels. But once on board his ship Ginger morphs into a Hocnog mercenary, gives him the boot, steals his ship, and flies off to resume his career in interstellar piracy.

Well, you asked.

Seriously now, it did have the the charming nature of Starman, which was my initial reaction. But this time around I think the star man stays.
~jon

Wow! Another possibility I hadn’t thought of. Darn those mercenaries. Thanks for the Starman comparison. I like that movie and actually did think about it when describing some of Fred’s actions. ~Tim

By: Estrella Azul

Estrella Azul — Fri, 01 Jan 2010 17:05:54 +0000

Lovely story Tim, I also vote for taking her with him
Will there be a sequel coming up on what happened? (Or two versions: one that he stayed, one that he took her with him?)

Happy New Year!

Thanks! I rather like that every reader makes up his or her own ending [because, let's face it, that's way less work for me] but I will consider writing at least one possible continuation. ~Tim

By: marc nash

marc nash — Fri, 01 Jan 2010 16:48:17 +0000

This charming tale put me in mind of those Marc Chagall paintings where love lifts the characters above gravity such as “Birthday Kiss”

The act of observing changes what is being observed, so my layman’s knowledge tells me faced with these two dilemmas, in one parallel universe he stays, while in the other he goes…

Isn’t it great to know that through parallel universes we can choose multiple outcomes! ~Tim

By: David G Shrock

David G Shrock — Thu, 31 Dec 2009 22:56:58 +0000

Gravity is a weak force, of course love is stronger. Nice play with words throughout. It could work either way, but given most of the story covers his yearning for more Ginger, Fred stays with Ginger comparing his attraction with the strong nuclear force, but realizes their future is governed by the Uncertainty Principle.

Excellent! ~Tim

By: lime

lime — Thu, 31 Dec 2009 22:30:39 +0000

i want to read where it goes with all the various choices…alternate endings please.

Hmmm, sure. I’ll pencil all that into my schedule. ~Tim

By: Sam

Sam — Thu, 31 Dec 2009 21:32:23 +0000

Great story! I vote for taking her with him.

Happy New Year!!

Noted and thanks for the RT! Happy new year! ~Tim

By: Laura Eno

Laura Eno — Thu, 31 Dec 2009 20:14:32 +0000

Those pesky linguistic databanks never understand the native slang.
I think he stayed on earth.

Maybe he should have studied the Urban Dictionary site too. Thanks for reading and the RT! ~Tim